Hello everyone! Tristan here... I need help too, haha!
Here's my paper:
I need help with my first body paragraph. I see the problems, and I'd like guidance (I don't want to be told exactly how to do it, so... yea...) on how to fix them. Thank you! I really appreciate it!
Also, if anyone could look at what I have so far on my second body paragraph (begins with survey), that would be great! Thanks!